In somecountries children are becoming overweight and unhealty. Some people think that the government should be responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do yo agree or disagree?
These days one of the important problem in the most part of the world is increase abnormally children weight and so many people believe that the government should bear this problem responsibility for fined best solution. while the small group of persons disagree with this opinion.I completely agree with and there are two main causes to support my view.
Firstly when in modern countries there are many new factories that they focused on find illegal ways to earn money since 1800 until 2000, the government has started cheek people Health rate. for example they were trying to decorate medicine checkup questioner for various groups. as a result it was first spotlight to establish research group that they were checking everything in manufacturing sectors. otherwise according to these results the government dedicate budget to people new products with special advertisements. For instance the vast part of children like to buy unhealthy Foods or drinks with spectacular colorful pictures on them. This is because the government accepted new violent role to Force these factories for using fresh and healthy primary Materials without unrealistic advertisement. In consequence after short months they realized changes absolutely in schools and universities.
Secondly the government who hope one day we would be able to increase health society rate and drop obesity, decided to arrange new training programs. for instance give free food, milk and fresh juice in all schools and invite all parents to enroll on health courses that display every months around the city. actually many factory shows that one of the popular things that led to students buy unhealthy and junk Food in school is unreal advertisement that introduce on first part. as a result Consuming health food from homemade increase if all parents would be helped the government.
In conclusion, the government, schools and parents should all shoulder that responsibility for protecting your children from Obese and unhealthy Lifestyles.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40952380952 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74289021144 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612698412698 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0416425819 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.714285714 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185016782652 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601266363357 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569003588307 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125235092501 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666220959974 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.