There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do
we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important
than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
It is true that a rich variety of musical styles can be found around the
world. Music is a vital part of all human cultures for a range of reasons,
and I would argue that traditional music is more important than modern,
international music.
Music is something that accompanies all of us throughout our lives. As
children, we are taught songs by our parents and teachers as a means
of learning language, or simply as a form of enjoyment. Children delight
in singing with others, and it would appear that the act of singing in a
group creates a connection between participants, regardless of their age.
Later in life, people’s musical preferences develop, and we come to see
our favourite songs as part of our life stories. Music both expresses and
arouses emotions in a way that words alone cannot. In short, it is difficult
to imagine life without it.
In my opinion, traditional music should be valued over the international
music that has become so popular. International pop music is often
catchy and fun, but it is essentially a commercial product that is marketed
and sold by business people. Traditional music, by contrast, expresses
the culture, customs and history of a country. Traditional styles, such as
...(example)..., connect us to the past and form part of our cultural
identity. It would be a real pity if pop music became so predominant that
these national styles disappeared.
In conclusion, music is a necessary part of human existence, and I
believe that traditional music should be given more importance than
international music.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, in conclusion, in short, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1334.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11111111111 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99289882435 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55938697318 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2493305769 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2857142857 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6428571429 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 24.0 4.38176352705 548% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432414444344 0.244688304435 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15761225076 0.084324248473 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135166929132 0.0667982634062 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146878186492 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.152881248517 0.056905535591 269% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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