Topic: Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
Everyone wants to be well-known as a singer or an actor because of may have many benefits. However, their fame can also be harmful. Personally, being a celebrity brings about more problems than advantages.
Admittedly, there are some good points of leading a famous life. First of all, being famous generally means being richer. For instance, a Korean pop star named Lisa Manoban earned millions of dollars during her career by holding live shows, appearing in the advertisement, etc. Another advantage is that you have fans. They will give you luxurious gifts and send a letter to you.
Nevertheless, there are also have some drawbacks. First and foremost, fame takes away privacy. As a result, there er under high pressure of maintaining their reputation they can not live true self but just to satisfy their fans. Furthermore, as celebrities, people usually lead a very hectic life which makes it difficult for them to keep up a balance. Many famous actors and actress experienced mental breakdowns, drug abuse or personal relationship collapsing because they can not handle the pressure of always being on a tight schedule
In conclusion, the pressure of maintaining image under the eye of the public and being always overworked are seriously harmful to the life of celebrities so those disadvantages for outweigh the advantages of being wealthy and having a lot of fans
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- Topic Being a celebrity such as a famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems 56
- Topic Being a celebrity such as a famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems 56
- Topic Being a celebrity such as a famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1160.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 226.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13274336283 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82597563749 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.66814159292 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 363.6 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 102.467602038 49.4020404114 207% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 89.2307692308 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3846153846 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227144902356 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757351952421 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104485727345 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142099019811 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0904114172756 0.056905535591 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.