Topic: In countries (where there is high unemployment) most pupils should be offered only primary education; there is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
People have different views about how youngsters should choose their education way. While some argue that in third countries, students should only finish their primary school without going to secondary school. I completely disagree with this opinion.
There are various disadvantages for youth when they decide to stop their education after completing elementary school in a growing society. Firstly, there is no doubt that the basics knowledge, which pupils are provided at primary school, are not included indispensable equipment for them to implement anything. Furthermore, juveniles still too little to drop out of school inasmuch as they even could not define what they dream, ergo, finding a job seems to be a far-fetched concept. Secondly, in a technology based-society, the rise of machinery is becoming stronger than ever, which leads to a sharp decrease in the demand for low skilled workers. Blue-collar workers in some factories, for example, are gradually taken place by high technology in recent years.
On the societal level, leaving school at the age of youth could bring gravely harm to the community as a whole. In these ages, students usually consider carelessly issues before they fulfill it. As a consequence, juvenile crime rate is getting rapidly in poorer countries. Governments find it difficult to arrest them, who should have responsibility for their actions, they need to suffer management from schools. Additionally, youngsters who would not go to schools tend to get married earlier than others and might have a child without any knowledge about bringing up a baby. These problems could have a negative effect on economic growth and social development.
In conclusion, for the demerits I mentioned above, I strongly believe that pupils in third countries should be offered secondary education instead of only accomplishing elementary education.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly accomplishing elementary education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, third, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44520547945 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88755295955 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.667808219178 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4235783498 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183999183117 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529531910875 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585353865565 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125914373936 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658979926904 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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