Towns and cities are attractive places. Some suggest the government should spend money putting in more works of art like paintings and statues to make them better to live in. Do you agree or disagree?
For over years, the metropolis has never failed to allure domestic and international citizen as its great opportunities and some people believe that government should allocate sufficient funds for promoting music and arts as a form of entertainment. From my personal of view, we cannot deny the enchantment of cities and towns; however, countries should employ most of the funds in important services such as education, health and transportation.
Because towns and cities provide major benefits to both inhabitants and expats like competitive job opportunities, excellent education or better medical treatment, it inevitably entices to a large number of people. The first obvious reason is that a high diversity and competition in townsites drives medical center to hire the most qualified staff and knowledgeable doctor, ensuring the best treatment for patients. This gives people live in big cities the highest caliber of medical, compared to those living in rural areas, who have to travel dozen of miles to visit a doctor or a specialist for a meticulous care. Besides giving a multitude of opportunities for healthcare, living in townsites also gives residents a myriad fine dining and shopping options as a benefit from cultural diversity. For example, Chicago, which is a mixed cultural city, serves a wide range of international food at different prices, bringing together different types of people and expanding ethnic restaurant options.
I personally think that government spending on the arts is a waste of money; instead, it is important to allocate funds for public service. The first reason explaining this is that most of the country’s revenue is collected through the taxation system so that it is imperative for governments to spend the available money on the most effective public of nation, which is beneficial to society in large. On the contrast, despite costing big money, the contribution of arts to national profits is mainly in entertainment purpose and just a minor in terms of education and economy. The second reason is that in order to make a city better and livable, the best and fastest way is to boost the economy and build an effective education system. This is further explained by the fact that if there more and more member joining the elite by giving them a free education to everybody or opening vocational classes, it will be a reduction in crimes, which eventually boosts the city’s growth in a long-run and make the urban lifestyle more valuable.
In conclusion, we cannot deny both the attraction of urban areas as it has a wide range of culture and opportunities and the contribution of art works to society. However, the government should value the money make a city truly livable by allocating it for more important areas such as education, healthcare, transportation or military instead of arts.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, second, so, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.3376753507 264% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2403.0 1615.20841683 149% => OK
No of words: 462.0 315.596192385 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2012987013 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00702328756 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 176.041082164 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541125541126 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 506.74238477 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.0471976381 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.642857143 106.682146367 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 20.7667163134 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204278797856 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670269663241 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413172558055 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122022195569 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445448354567 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 13.0946893788 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 50.2224549098 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 78.4519038076 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 9.78957915832 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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