It is often said that a large number of people all over the world are drawing attention to help everyone in the world who are impoverished or disadvantaged. In fact, there are some who hold firmly their belief that we should not help people in others countries as long as there are problems in our own soceity. However, others argue convincingly that we have an obligation to help those who live beyond our national borders. As far as i am concerned, I entirely agree with the latter argument. Therefore, some major points will be addressed in the following paragraphs.
On the one hand, there is a clear envidence for other people to defend their opposite view. It is a well documented fact that thus the problems are on our doorstep, and there are obvious ways to help. For example, it is possible to find homeless, and even in wealthiest of cities, and for those who concerned about this problem, there are opportunities for compaigners in order to give money to support them or to donate clothes or just even talk and share with their problems.
On the other hand, there are two primary points for people to support their view that we should help everybody all over the word instead of prioritising loacl charity. First and foremost, it is commonly accepted that in some countries the problems that people have to face are more serious than those in our own communities. A clear example being found to prove is that when children are dying from curable diseases in African countries, individuals in richer countries can save lives by paying for vaccines or donating money to the international charity. Equally important, there is no denying that it is even easier to help unlucky foreign people. For instance, tourists can help pauper in other countries which they visited by giving them clothes, food and so on directly.
In conclusion, it is my strong belief that national boudaries should not stop us from helping those who are in need. Accordingly, I highly recommend that the governments should enhance people's awareness in terms of benovolence. If this recommendation is caried out, the comprehensive development of our generation will be ensured.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 23, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
It is often said that a large number of people all over the world are drawing a...
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Line 1, column 436, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... beyond our national borders. As far as i am concerned, I entirely agree with the...
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Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: ALL_OVER_THE_WORD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'all over the world' (=globally)?
Suggestion: all over the world
...heir view that we should help everybody all over the word instead of prioritising loacl charity. ...
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Line 5, column 557, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...ing money to the international charity. Equally important, there is no denying that it ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92076502732 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76215995302 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540983606557 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7851266035 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.5625 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263832341462 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821732761621 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465683529294 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157185597859 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668223467837 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.