Young people are often influenced in their behaviors and situations by others in the same age group. This is called “peer pressure”. Do the disadvantages of peer pressure outweigh the advantages?
Commonly, the young generations undergo peer pressure which forces them to endeavor to achieve what their counterparts do. From my viewpoint, although there are both benefits and detrimental impacts associated with this phenomenon, the positive effects on individuals should be more considered than the minor drawbacks.
On the one hand, trying to keep up with the success of friends might cause discontent and depression in young people. Indeed, because young people still do not understand deeply their true value and cannot figure out their passion in life as well, misleading comparisons with people of similar age, disorientation, and trying to follow the crowd are inevitable. This will become worse if they experience failures and feel inferior to others, leading to the fear of expressing themselves as well as potential - self-distancing from family and friends. This may be an alarming issue as the worst consequence that may happen is suicide and Japan is a typical example where 70% of suicide was among men aged 20-44.
However, although peer pressure is often associated with negative connotations, I suppose that it plays a crucial role in reinforcing positive habits and attitudes in social and scholastic aspects thereby fostering social mobility. When surrounded by peers who excel academically, and succeed in their careers, the young would be inspired to push their boundaries and strive for greater achievements. For instance, in top-tier universities where almost all students are good at academic fields and soft skills, positive peer pressure fosters each individual to broaden their horizons, improve their skills, and ultimately become comprehensive citizens contributing to social development. In contrast, if there is no comparison between other people, adolescents might stay backward in continuously developing society as they have an illusion about their accomplishments and do not spare more effort, hindering the sustainable development of society in the future.
In conclusion, I opine that the positive aspects of peer pressure trump the negative ones. As long as young people are consulted to be clear about their values, and only focus on beneficial influences, they can thrive in their personal and social lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, well, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, in contrast, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1913.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5289017341 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98921591806 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635838150289 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.7373882552 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.416666667 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8333333333 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273570854569 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094864022912 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607076146578 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162417872279 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271061228866 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 13.0946893788 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.39 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.0 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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