Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same as as adults who commit crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people often argue that youth crimes should be considered as similarly as adults crimes. While I agree with that viewpoint to a certain extent, I strongly believe that governments should not apply this punishment policy.
On the one hand, young people who engage in criminal activities should be received the same punishment as grown-up people in some major crimes such as: murder, rapes. Firstly, if juvenile delinquents were not penalized in the same way as normal people, it would be unjustifiable towards not only the victims but also other criminals. Secondly, children are easily influenced by their peers who commit crimes and set them as bad role models. For example, a high school student tends to imitate his or her friend’s juvenile offenders. Thus, there will be a significant increase in the crimes rates among juniors.
On the other hand, the harsh punishment for crimes among young adults can have pernicious impacts, especially for petty crimes. The primary reason for this viewpoint is that youngsters do not have enough sufficient intellects and moral capacity to be fully aware of the consequences of their actions . Besides, they lack the conditions to be trial defendants as grown-up people. Therefore, they should be given the second chance to rehabilitate with the help of community services by some ways including being educated school curriculum and being informed about the choices of job opportunities. This would result in the fact that young re-offenders will be likely to make contribution to the whole society.
In conclusion, I believe that children taking part in criminal activities should be treated similarly with adults in case of serious crimes, not minor crimes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1457.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29818181818 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77882016779 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610909090909 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9700424542 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.076923077 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.9230769231 7.06120827912 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341679630169 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104339279182 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709083480028 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196004907091 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042777793884 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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