Young people who commit serious crimes, such as robbery or violent attacks should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Teenagers are becoming increasingly involved in criminal activity as the age of criminality decreases. This begs the question of whether current approaches to rehabilitating juvenile offenders are ineffective. Some people believe that teenagers should face the same penalties as adults. This statement does not, in my opinion, hold water.
To begin with, many young people commit crimes because they lack the maturity to think through their actions. Mental instability and a lack of control over one's emotions can lead to criminal behavior in adolescents. For example, acts of violence are frequently the result of small disagreements among friends or the theft of something as a way to show one's displeasure. As a result, it can be concluded that children who commit crimes are those who have been neglected by their parents or guardians. Rebelliousness may be the worst way for a child to get their parents' attention. A child's cry for help may be disguised as a criminal act when they believe that rebellious behavior like fighting or stealing will draw more attention. The child's fragile nature will be hurt, which will worsen the situation and lead to even more severe consequences and uncontrollable behavior if punishment is applied, such as imprisonment or another harsher method of punishment. Bullied students' families suffer greatly, and society as a whole suffers when minors are prosecuted as adults for minor crimes, such as shoplifting, theft, or extortion.
On the other hand, applying the same fines could have a significant impact on the rate of juvenile crime. Punishment that isn't severe enough can encourage young people to make more serious mistakes, such as drug trafficking and kidnapping, which can lead to more serious crimes like murder.. In the meantime, children who receive harsh punishment are more likely to think twice about what they are about to do, which helps stabilize society by decreasing recidivism. Instead of severely punishing children who commit crimes, they should educate them to understand that instead of severely punishing children who commit crimes.
To summarize, it is unjust to treat criminals who have committed crimes while they were minors. A young person's impulsiveness should not cost them their future, because the law has leniency.
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- Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes for example working for a charity improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children To what extent do you agree or disagree 73
- The best curriculum is not one based on a static body of knowledge but one which teaches students to cope with change To what extent do you agree or disagree 11
- Around the world many adults are working from home and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible Do you think this is a positive or negative development Give reasons for your answer and includ 67
- Some people think that offenders should be put in prison Others however believe that providing offenders with education and training is more effective than putting them in prison Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...age of criminality decreases. This begs the question of whether current approaches to rehabilitating ju...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...the theft of something as a way to show ones displeasure. As a result, it can be con...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...rate of juvenile crime. Punishment that isnt severe enough can encourage young peopl...
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Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
... lead to more serious crimes like murder.. In the meantime, children who receive h...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... crimes while they were minors. A young persons impulsiveness should not cost them thei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, while, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1937.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32142857143 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86639852259 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565934065934 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1968450357 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.611111111 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265260636588 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713193068969 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054309784584 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143197849817 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067159264786 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.