Young people who commit serious crimes, such as robbery or violent attacks should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are arguments about whether juveniles should be confronted with consequences for committing severe crimes like robbery or assault in an equal way as adults. I believe, they ought to take responsibility for their acts, yet differently, and I will explain why.
Firstly, young people with immature awareness, peers pressure will easily fall into negative behaviour. Therefore, the focus of the minor justice system should be rehabilitated so that she or he can be a functioning and law-abiding adult. For example, instead of sending them to a prison where heinous prisoners are living, the judge may let them stay in reformatory school they can continue the academic curriculum and combine it with counselling, therapy. These solutions will assist them in identifying the proper actions to take and avoiding those who or situation that is harmful to their future. Besides, if these juveniles are treated very seriously by the court, they may carry serious and long-lasting consequences like mental ill-health or disorder behaviour. Secondly, the minors are future generations, thus, we should educate them and give them opportunities to contribute and to be responsible members of society.
Admittedly, individuals who are young or mature criminals ought to take their penalties for their crimes. However, sending them to the same court show the unfairness and mercilessness for the young because they are not mature enough to take the severe sentences equal to the adults.
In conclusion, I don't agree with the view that teenagers’ delinquency should take the same punishment as adults. The reason is that they are too young to regulate their thoughts and the heavy penalty may bring impulsive outcomes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37777777778 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93088187874 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6733767544 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173736670396 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629089949204 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504903729947 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105408541099 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205510458973 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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