Being a celebrity- such as a famous film Star sports personality- brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that a celebrity bring more benefits or more problems?
To be a celebrity is so interesting for most of people in a trial lots of individuals desire to be an actress or a football player. Although being famous and earning money is so desirable, there are considerable difficulties, as well. This essay will shed light on the advantages and the problems of being a star, while providing my supportive opinion upon the benefits to be much I catching than the disadvantages.
To begin with, stars of famous which has provided many advantages for that being famous is a mental needs of most persons. So that, they enjoy the emotion of being loved and accepted in society. Next, such people earn much amount of money, because of that, they are not only wealthy with a good future, but also supply a considerably great fate for their next generations. Rich people benefit good conditions to be chosen by rich and famous members of public. This concludes them to have a better marriage, and in turn are supported with such a rich mate.
Although being a celebrity means providing lots of benefits, it will bring some difficulties for the Stars, too. The first and foremost, they do not have any privacy each individual need time to rest and refreshing without being interrupted by others. It is hard for a star to benefit such moments, because of which there are many stars who were costumes not to be recognised by people just to have a night off. Another important problem to mention is that they are focused by media. Any fault or crime committed by a star is concentrated by TV, newspapers, and internet sites. Have they experienced a diverse or have drunk much, they cannot go out of home not to be captured by journalists. Nevertheless there are some great problems for celebrities, in my opinion the benefits are much considerable for them.
To sum up, the stars benefit from fame, love in society, wealth and great destiny for themselves and their children. These are in my idea, much more essential than problems including lack of privacy and being under focus of media.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...To be a celebrity is so interesting for most of people in a trial lots of individuals desire t...
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Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'lot'?
Suggestion: lot
...teresting for most of people in a trial lots of individuals desire to be an actress ...
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Line 1, column 382, Rule ID: I_AM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
...ve opinion upon the benefits to be much I catching than the disadvantages. T...
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Line 5, column 101, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'need'?
Suggestion: need
...tages for that being famous is a mental needs of most persons. So that, they enjoy th...
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Line 9, column 693, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
...home not to be captured by journalists. Nevertheless there are some great problems for celeb...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nevertheless, so, well, while, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 13.1623246493 213% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79772079772 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71530747808 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532763532764 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1809097838 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0588235294 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6470588235 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253851592121 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788148908098 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454311496853 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154450851089 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037704736791 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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