Certain personal qualities cannot be achieved through university studies. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples
In modern competitive word, many people believe that chasing after academic courses help in building their career and certain people opine that in this race, these people are losing important traits. I completely agree that education cannot develop important personal qualities like dedication, loyalty, honesty, politeness act as precursor towards your professional life and in addition without having the trait of tolerance towards other’s faith, it may be impossible to construct a tolerant society.
Firstly, many academic courses like engineering, law and accounts merely focuses on technical parts of the subject. During the course, they just cram the ideas, spending several hours, leading them to aspirant whose main aim of life is to draw higher salaries which can render them a luxurious life. People from these school of thought always tend to run low on important qualities as mentioned above. Without these personal qualities, they may be a boon in certain businesses in initial stage but over the passage of time they do not reflect significant qualities hence they fail to prove their ability and earn respect in their respective fields.
For instance, as per survey conducted by American times magazine in 2012 on charismatic leaders , it was proved that without having the personal qualities, individuals could not reach to leadership position in their respective fields and consequently they start developing negative attitude and fails to make a significant impression in their lives as well as their professions.
With the student exchange program and globalization, world is moving towards the place where people of different cultures and faith need to exist and work together. In this scenario, tolerance needs to be imbibed in these citizens. Until now, most of the education system in the world have not started any major programme to address the issues which may be arising from above developments. For example, in India since the partition of countries, Indian curriculum have shown the contribution of national leaders like Mr. Mahatma Gandhi, Mr. Jawaharlal lal Nehru who stressed on pluralistic society and tolerant society. This particular factor has acted as precursor to develop an Indian nation as most tolerant nation among its neighboring countries
To sum up, I believe that education fails to imbibe personal qualities which contributes to one’s carrier and does not address the concept of tolerance which is important to construct a pluralistic society
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46786632391 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79275502056 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596401028278 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.3250879789 49.4020404114 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.25 106.682146367 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.4166666667 20.7667163134 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1666666667 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116558817021 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413310776005 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382436597581 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.061657565073 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342115568026 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 13.0946893788 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.04 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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