Government investment in the arts such as music and theatre is a waste of money Governments must invest this money in public services instead

The world witnessed a lot of diverse developments after world war II. Governments in many countries have expressed their interest in arts through a lot of investments, yet, a few people suppose that the government should allocate more resources to public services instead. Personally, I suppose the investment in arts is crucial and it should remain for many reasons.

Arts are vital in many ways. Firstly, arts are a means of reflecting the cultures and customs of a country. Therefore, the government needs to put effort into continuously transmitting these values to the community so they will not lose their own identity. For example, Vietnamese could probably forget their dressing custom - the Ao Dai if schools do not require their students to wear this dress and if there are not any "Ao Dai" galleries or museums to remind them about it. Secondly, arts are one of the things that travelers look for when they come to a country. By investing in arts, a country or a city would become more interesting and attractive to travelers. with an increase in the number of tourists, the economy would improve considerably. Finally, arts also serve the local people as well. People who are curious about their history, culture and customs could come to these galleries, museums, or theatres.

People who advocate that it is a waste of money to invest in arts, usually present the idea that public services are far more important and the current one does not meet society's demand. These people opine that their life could be in jeopardized if the number of the police station, hospital and fire station is not large enough to cover the whole nation and to reach their place within a few minutes. They also demand that the public service should be at its best convenient and be ready to serve them, instead of having them waiting in a line for a long period of time. However, they should be aware that it is not the police officers, doctors, or firefighters' responsibility to guarantee their safety. They need to protect themselves from any possible dangers. Moreover, the resources are limit and there are many perspectives of a country that the government needs to make an improvement. Therefore, it can not be done to invest solely in public services only.

To recapitulate, for the purposes of remaining the ritual and culture, attracting more tourists and serving the local people's interest, the government should take arts into consideration for investment seriously and equally with the public services as it is wrong to say that one is more important than the other.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: With
...nteresting and attractive to travelers. with an increase in the number of tourists, ...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...aving them waiting in a line for a long period of time. However, they should be aware that it ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i suppose

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 434.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96543778802 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72731857578 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523041474654 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 680.4 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.2871965581 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.75 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232424939707 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649598718367 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668177158975 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150882639091 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403151964277 0.056905535591 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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