It has been claimed that workers over 50 are not responsive to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and that for this reason younger workers are to be preferred.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been claimed that workers over 50 are not responsive to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and that for this reason younger workers are to be preferred.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Submitted by divya601 on Tue, 05/29/2018 - 23:37

Drastic changes in workplace are observed with the advancement of modern technology over the past years. Workplace are filled with young and dynamic graduate students with creative thinking. But there is lack of experience in most of the products due to lack of guidance from experts. I strongly believe that creative thinking with experience is essential to gain profits, which can be achieved only by employing more senior workers in workplace.

The primary benefit of having young people in work place is, they are more enthusiastic to learn about new emerging technologies. As they are completely aware of the changes, able to provide creative ideas rather than old inefficient ones. we can shoot a short film or advertisement with an iphone for an instance, uploading them in you tube gains more publicity. Whereas, in conventional thinking it requires costly equipment to shoot. In addition to this, young people works with strong zeal and energy filled with positive attitude. They are very much aware of their competitors in the market, as a consequence ideas will be ahead in order to win.

Nevertheless having young people in workplace has many benefits, lack of experience is a contentious issue. To begin with, young people require proper guidance from senior experts about their innovative ideas. Amateur ideas can leads to disasters in business. For example, developer writes a bank application without considering security. Phishing attack easily happens on the bank website looting entire money. Even though, elder people cannot make physical works, we can utilize their experience and knowledge which is much valuable to avoid future issues. Creative thinking without senior peope guidance is infact a negative idea.

To conclude, young people are required for progressing business with innovative ideas and new technology. But these ideas without properly being reviewed by expert people may lead to serious threats for growth of the business. I strongly believe that it is essential to employ elder people in our modern place in order to achieve profits.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, may, nevertheless, thus, whereas, for example, in addition, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34346504559 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69323209846 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58358662614 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.0508637093 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.9 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.45 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111882276927 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349629615641 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0333616980688 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0743592186854 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258990120541 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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