Local people do not go very often to museums or historic sites. Why is that so? What can be done to change the situation?
Historical place and monuments are the integral part of culture though it has been noticed that citizens merely visit these places. This essay will discuss prime cause such as less interest of people in country’s history and less attractions being available. Moreover, it will also suggest progressive steps that could be took to address this issue which includes organizing concerts and exhibitions to entice public at these places along with free access to local.
To start with, people are studying about the historical places from their childhood and reviewed many times in their textbooks which make it less interesting to visit. According to the empirical survey conducted at Moenjodaro, an ancient civilization located in Pakistan, many respondents revealed that the are already aware of the place, have seen the pictures in history books and found nothing adventurous which intend them to visit it again. Thus, it is agreed that as citizens are aware of their countries past events and have read about it multiple times, makes them incurious about the places.
Historical places and museums lack public attractions and activities that motivate citizens to visit these places. It is recommended that historical civilizations and museums must adjoin fun activities such as theme parks and restaurants which tempt people to visit. This same concept was realised at Singapore space museum where on first floor it offers virtual games, on second floor there is museum & roof top restaurant that has exotic menu. Therefore, the museum turns to be a family excursion. Moreover, entertainment activities such as musical concerts, food festivals & clothing exhibitions at historical places & museums will also add attractions. For instance, Mohatama palace in Karachi was not frequently visited by people but once these mega events are setup, increased in footfall of local citizens was also documented. Consistent with this line of thinking, it is fair to believe that offering attractions at historical places will retain local people visit.
To conclude, citizens detain themselves from historical places and museums as they are already aware of the history and culture. Hence, in order to capture their attention administrators required to add values and adventures to these premises. It is predicted that renovation in historical places with modern technologies will increase the flow of people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun attractions is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...of people in country's history and less attractions being available. Moreover, ...
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Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...akistan, many respondents revealed that the are already aware of the place, have seen t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2041.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48655913978 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78682104836 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55376344086 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.370712207 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.5625 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133598744244 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539482196448 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033546726845 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808977200305 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473362084017 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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