Many teenagers now have the their own smartphone what are the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your opinion

Granted, having smartphone for the youngsters are reasonable because this changes the way people communicate. Nonetheless, it is considered that smartphone making teenagers become indolent as the negative impact.

Having flexible time is the positive side of smartphone for adolescent, and it maintains communication with others. This is because this device provides highest features which can help them communicating with their colleagues through an online application, having just around several seconds to convey even they are in different places. An example, there are 70% Indonesian youngsters, using androids from Samsung products, and this offers software like Whats-app including 23mp of camera resolution. If their parents have a work in rural areas, they make a video conference, needing 2-second to connect each others. Therefore, it will make more easier to keep in touch with others, resulting in their relationship increase as my opinion.

Albeit this can improve their communication, this usually brings the teenagers addicted, leading to neglect their responsibility. As such, this smartphone is used by the youngster for the long time each day, and it consist of some technology making people rely on this one, reducing their time to study. According to survey from University of Barcelona, the Spanish adolescents allocate around 16-hour per day for playing PUBG game in smartphone, and after that they stay up late until 3:00 a.m. to finish their task. Also, this university invent that technologies have a dopamine substance which damage the nerve in the brain. This results in academic perform decrease significantly, and I believe that teenagers can not compete with others.

To recapitulate, being lazy is the impact using smartphone for youngsters, albeit this contains the sophisticated of technology which can make them more convenient to communicate. Will this bring the teenagers more flexible in communication without disturb their own duty?

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Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'provides the highest'.
Suggestion: provides the highest
...ith others. This is because this device provides highest features which can help them communicat...
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Line 3, column 191, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to communicate' or 'communicate'.
Suggestion: to communicate; communicate
...es highest features which can help them communicating with their colleagues through an online...
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Line 3, column 642, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...ct each others. Therefore, it will make more easier to keep in touch with others, resulting...
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Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'consists'?
Suggestion: consists
...ster for the long time each day, and it consist of some technology making people rely o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, nonetheless, second, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60666666667 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9742898312 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606666666667 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4822964582 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.142857143 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 7.06120827912 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266315071244 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992488433983 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432621514707 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171559596137 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133204078775 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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