Nowadays many young people leave home at an early age to either study or work in another city.'Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages for young people? Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own experience.
In this days, for many people, leaving home and family in earlier ages to a distant city, considered as a great time for education or work. Although, this notion accepted a good chance by a large number of people, in the opposite idea some people believe this decision may have the disadvantage for them. For the purpose of this essay, I would discuss both sides.
To begin with, there are various advantages or backward with leaving home in early age. On the one hand, study or work in another city away from family, particularly in the advanced city, this could bring the best job opportunities or study with better facilities for them. For example, my cousin went to London for education when he was 16 years old. After 5 years he was a well-educated young man and now is working in an international company.
On the other hand, although the young people become self-confident and independent by living away from their parent, this may have a mental injury for them. Because teenagers are in the sensitive age and without the parental care they may get damage from the environment. For instance, a recent scientific research conducted with Tehran University researchers shows that many of teens that lived alone in a far city have been involved in mental diseases, drugs or even crimes.
In conclusion, there are several compelling reasons to agree with sending young people to another city for study or work. My personal belief is that benefits of education or employment in a big city in the early age are outweighed of its drawbacks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1280.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83018867925 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67511241167 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588679245283 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6826142071 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.666666667 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31561060344 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116372195795 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720556492022 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190004110218 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04129943437 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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