Education plays a pivotal role in shaping up the characters of children as well as prepare them to survive in this modern world. Some intellectuals suggest that school curriculum should eliminate the subjects based on soft skills such as art and music, so that, students should be trained more to cope up with ever- evolving technological advancements in today's world. However, I do feel that it would not be justifiable in any way.
It is commonly said that music and art are the food of the soul, then, how can we imagine educational institutions eliminating these subjects? No doubt, students should be equipped well with the knowledge of technology, but learning of these basic subjects should not be undervalued. By learning about art and music, children do develop a creative instinct and it helps them to express their thoughts and feelings in a better way.
Moreover, music can enhance their artistic skills and majority of the children love to learn about art. They should not be deprived of such beautiful learning experience. Engaging a child into studying about art would make him or her more sensitive, creative and a balanced person. If they are encouraged to develop love for art in their early age, they would be abler to cope with the complicated learning of subjects based on programming and conceptual learning.
On the other hand, some have the opinion that, nowadays, in this era of cut- throat competition, children should be encouraged to study only science and technology based subjects which will assist them to have promising careers in the future. Art does not hold much value in this fast-paced world.
In the end, though, the significance of technology based subjects cannot be ignored, I still advocate my perception that learning of art and music also contribute to shape up the children to become better human beings.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, well, no doubt, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05194805195 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74807312245 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548701298701 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6746569801 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.692307692 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303478422872 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106463407735 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580436363846 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172156578245 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667953490217 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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