In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.
There are innumerable justifications why people might disapprove of allowing young people to do things instead of studying. The first objection is those who decide to work or travel may feel threatened by the outside world. Due to being immature also not have enough life experience, they may feel overwhelmed. Moreover, the decision makes them to experience the world lonely and differently in order to gain the real knowledge of the field they want to pursue, which would therefore challenge the ability of learning and reflect the information they own. This may pose as an against to their security since changing to adapt into a new environment. Another justification would be a waste of time. Young children can both learn and experience life at university when there are peers and teachers, who are willing to help them attain certain needs that they want. For an example, they can talk to the professors to get the assistant position or ask the friends to get access to the job.
Inspite of the downsides mentioned-above, i would like to say that encouraging young people to work or travel is a positive approach. First and foremost, they have time to carefully prepare and decide which major is worth pursuing. By applying to the desired position, not only that they can teach themselves but also get the real challanges and demands to test out if the job is meant for them. Another supporting idea is while having a year off to do what the young children want, they can do everything wanted and after can fully focus on the major pursuing. To be more specific, they can freely do anything as a free will with no worried to get those things done and after can have no regret of losing chances. Additionally, the precious experiences might help them to get new ideas and useful in the field major.
In sum, it seems to me that encouraging people to go to work is advantageous in a variety of ways.
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- Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere To what extent do you agree with this view 84
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73273273273 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71238838378 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561561561562 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3635193618 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.066666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192821591116 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677218905672 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697248472114 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149064563741 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0145940717931 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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