Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, there is controversial debate between people in the society, whether kinds should be ordered to exercise group activities or stay on their own during their free time. I strongly believe that group activities are an essential element for a healthier future.
On the one hand, some parents believe that it is much better that youngster should involve in individual practices. This is because solo activities often increase self confidence and teach children how to depend on their own, rather than depending on other teammates. Moreover, families who adopt this approach in raising up their kids, claims that is has helped them to avoid harmful influences on their children from misbehaved peers. For example, mitigating the exposure to criminal acts or taking drugs.
On the other hand, many people think that young adults should be enrolled in group activities for a better future. As a result of teamwork, kid’s interpersonal skills should be developed more rapidly than kids participating in individual activities. For instants, an academic study by Memorial University in Canada, show that young people who engaged in team activities are not facing any problem in expressing their thoughts and also enjoys a great social personality.
In conclusion, I would argue that both points of view has a convincing arguments , but I strongly believe that had it not been for group activities, a vast number of elements contributing in our children growth would have been missing.
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Suggestion: argument
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Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1262.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 237.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32489451477 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81641761417 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.645569620253 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6876710848 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.2 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335903081698 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115891190232 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668834560668 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186028744654 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715425009997 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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