Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate.
Which do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It is argued that schools should be more of fun, while others argue that acdemics is the only purpose. However, I believe that there should be a balance between both- studies and entertainment- to make a person successful in life.
Firstly, extra-curricular activities play a very important part in the development of a child. This is largely because activities such as community service develop a child's real-world skills, thus helping them succeed in their life : both academically and emotionally.Based on one of the recent studies by the Harvard University,it has been proved that those who were exposed to the world during their childhood are able to cope up with struggles in life.Therefore, it is proved that only with studies, one can not definitely succeed in life.
Secondly,excessive study leads to burnout and only academics do not teach social skills and team work.This is due to the fact that they need to do activities where interaction is needed, to understand how to deal with others; not by spending their entire life locked up in a room in the middle of a pile of books.For example, as per the latest survey by the UK government, more than 80% of those who have succeeded in their life used to get involved in various activities in addition to studies. As a result,it can be concluded that entertainmnet and studies should go side-by-side to ensure a successful future.
To conclude from the examples and arguments given above, I firmly agree that schools should be entertaining while ensuring the required knowledge, to make a person successful in their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0608365019 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12056618426 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589353612167 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.2975951904 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 159.040746929 49.4020404114 322% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 190.142857143 106.682146367 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.5714285714 20.7667163134 181% => OK
Discourse Markers: 17.2857142857 7.06120827912 245% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158348620292 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768149330898 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057849551808 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111080613279 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465174026374 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.2 13.0946893788 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.3001002004 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.1190380762 166% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.7795591182 167% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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