Some people think that teenagers should do unpaid work to help society because this will help them to be better individuals and also improve the society a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this proposal?
While there are grounds to argue that making teenagers as a volunteer and unpaid work would be a great assistant for them and the society, it can similarly be argued that working unpaid of young peoples, would be an infringement of their justices. In this essay, I shall examine the merits both sides of the debates.
One argument is that working young people on voluntary works would help the community to improve. It is vivid that these days, the society suffers from lack of workforce and teenagers working would direct effect on the shortage of the labour in public workplaces. For instance, by recruit teenagers as a volunteer in the health sector, not only the young person would benefit from being in such a workplace and find his or her potency of future career, but also the society would fulfil its job vacancies and the absences of labour in some general work.
Another argument in which there is a prominent merit for teenagers individually is that through working they could find a sense of responsibility that is worthy of their future. At present, teenagers spend much of their spare time, playing football or online games, whereas going out to work, particularly as a volunteer will teach them social skills such as team working, leadership and critical management. Therefore, through these skills they are more likely to be successful in their future professional career.
Despite those arguments, there is an equally strong case to be made that it would be morally wrong if teenagers work during their childhood, especially if they did not earn a salary. This explained by the fact that in recent years there has been a global movement to stop the practice of child labour. The principal philosophy of this movement is that, teenage years are just the time for education and playing and so working at that time, is justifiably and morally wrong and it could be possible that the young people would exposed to be exploited by employers in workplaces.
To sum up, I personally believe that teenagers and the society, both are likely to benefit from working at their teenage time. Although, the situation will be compounded by the fact that they would not earn any payments and the danger of being exploited even is existing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 527, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'expose'
Suggestion: expose
...be possible that the young people would exposed to be exploited by employers in workpla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, similarly, so, therefore, whereas, while, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91076115486 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58742069133 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509186351706 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.9722358914 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.923076923 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3076923077 20.7667163134 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208114685533 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783251088635 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0311404575236 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120265974554 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304436355348 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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