In some schools, students must study music and learn to play a musical instrument. In other schools, studying music may not be required or there may be no music classes at all. Do you think all students should have to study music? Support your opinion with reasons and examples.
People's opinions differ as to whether or not schools should be provided music lessons and pupils should learn to play musical instrument compulsory. I completely agree with this aspect of education, and will give my reasons below.
First of all, music has the power to unite and connect people, in the stressful school life, I do think that music is a vital media to help pupils to release their excessive pressure and express their emotions through musical instrument. In addition, during the study of different history of music writers, pupils can benefit more than what they think. For instance, they would build up a positive thinking from the story of classical music writer Benethon, he overcomes his weaknesses and beomes a huge successful music writer.
Secondly, more music is listened, more spiritual health will have. According to the psycholgical research, you may feel relaxing and happy when you listened to music, thus more good cells in your body will be established. Moreover, more confident also developed through practising a musical instruments. Perhaps my son would be a good example, I witnessed his changes sigificantly before and after he started to learn a Oboe. Before he learned a Oboe, he is a shy and speakless boy, however after learning Oboe, he became more enthusiastic, confident and talkative. I can see the magical power of music to change someone's mind.
In conclusion, music lesson and learn to play a musical instrument is essential in school life, I think schools principles should have to enforce them in schools
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
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Suggestion: an
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1307.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12549019608 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7242062147 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607843137255 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 403.2 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4736181099 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.916666667 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5833333333 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450374333681 0.244688304435 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161356067804 0.084324248473 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113782784545 0.0667982634062 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291506364494 0.151304729494 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631518859271 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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