Some think increasing business and cultural contact between nations is positive. Others think it leads to the disappearance of the national identity.
Discuss both views and state your own opinion.
*Writing Task II / Agus ismansyah*
Increasing the intensity of business and culture between countries is a positive assumption, some people assume, but on the other hand, it will degrade national identity. I think that increasing the intensity of both needs to be considered in order to continue to grow even though they have to find solutions to the decrease in the identity value.
On the other hand, the development of a country into a developed country has the main supporters, one of which is business and culture. Partnerships and openness that are forged with other countries are a breath of fresh air in boosting investment in the country and small communities as well as the exchange of information about their respective cultures. For example, Indonesia, whose status is still a developed country, establishes a partnership with China in the context of business and culture, namely building a joint stone mine whose technology is imported from China, but all employees in the company are Indonesian citizens because the mining area belongs to Indonesia with a 30% profit sharing for China and 70% for the state of Indonesia. This will boost the absorption of unemployment in Indonesia and improve the economy of society and the state as well as the establishment of an indirect exchange of cultural information with the community.
Even so, the fear of losing national identity is a definite possibility when business and cultural access occurs with foreign countries openly, because this will provide opportunities for foreign investors rather than local investors in investing in a country and cultural exchange occurs without security filters. For example, the country where I live, Indonesia opens partnerships freely with various countries in the world, the first thing that will happen is that investors and rich people in the world will come to Indonesia to invest and this will close opportunities for local investors who have little capital. Secondly, there is an exchange of culture and behavior in every aspect of society through access to public information, media, and direct meetings with outsiders without any filter for early education. Although this has an impact on improving the country's economy, the first , alternative way is in the form of regulation for every foreign investor in doing business in Indonesia which is formed by the government to provide opportunities for local investors. Second, making policies in filtering external culture in various aspects and educating every component of society through educational institutions.
In conclusion, I think any idea that can increase the positive value for a country is worth trying, while an alternative way to deal with the loss of national identity can be to build government regulations so that there are opportunities for all components as well as filtering public regulations and education pathways for each public element as a solution. in the face of loss of national identity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, even so, for example, i think, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2509.0 1615.20841683 155% => OK
No of words: 474.0 315.596192385 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29324894515 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92201667501 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485232067511 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 806.4 506.74238477 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.2975951904 177% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.2417485284 49.4020404114 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 193.0 106.682146367 181% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.4615384615 20.7667163134 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155484696312 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684381832222 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634902775999 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107337762652 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102164825681 0.056905535591 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.7 13.0946893788 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.48 50.2224549098 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 11.3001002004 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.1190380762 162% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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