There should be strict laws banning people from taking photographs of people under 18 in order to protect young celebrities and the children of celebrities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is sometimes argued that for protecting young celebrities or children of celebrities under 18 strict laws need to be passed. Personally, I agree with this point of view.
On the one hand, some people believe that being famous has cost which means that fans and followers are looking in photos of their role model and it is not acceptable shooting photos of them being forbidden. In addition, media make money by posting their pictures especially if they reveal a secret or even stop rumors. Also, supporters of this arguments assert that this photo could be informative, for example, pictures of Bill Gates’ daughter who is making a name for herself without the help of her family or Yara Shahidi who is an actress under 18, and once Oprah Winfrey endorsed her for president of United State.
On the other hand, those who are against taking photo of famous young members of the society have their own reasons. Firstly, to be followed by photographers put a lot of pressure on teenagers. They have to dress and act as kids of stars which does not seem fair. They deserve to have a normal life like their peer group. Secondly, these photos could have effect on their reputation and put them in trouble. He or she may feel the sarcasm in the public voice for the rest of life. . Another negative issue is that being on the press, internet and other media could change their character, behavior and cause personality disorder like act as a self-centered or egotistical one.
In conclusion, I fully support the view that strict laws should be introduced to guard people under 18, so they will have a stable up-bringing and they will not face difficulties mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78965517241 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56809805041 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606896551724 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.370100161 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.846153846 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188646405658 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631075408978 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898169086354 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147310073778 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0986069189415 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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