These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
As we move into the twenty-first century, technology is affecting many different areas of life and social communications are no exception. Indeed, the traditional forms of relationships has revolutionized by the internet as well as mobile phones. While there are some drawbacks involved in this trend, I believe the benefits are more prominent.
On the one hand, many commentators justifiably argue that there are advantages for the people who are tend to use the smartphones and internet for communicate. To begin with, interacting through these worthwhile tools enable individuals to make a faster and easier connection with other people in different places on the globe. Simply put, the certain mobile apps such as Skype, Facebook, Instagram and so on allow families and friends in different corners of the world to keep in touch whenever they want and share their photos, videos and other documents. People, moreover, can be more social and enhance their knowledge concerning other cultures by communicating with foreigners in a more fascinating way. This in turn also provides people any access to more information about jobs, education and healthcare
However, the drawbacks, cannot be ignored. The most axiomatic argument is concerned with the lessen people’s emotion in conversation. That is to say, the people who are compelled to interact with their relatives by virtual devices suffer from lacking of the physical contact that are needed in emotional conversations. This in turn would jeopardizes intimacy in relationships between people and pose a threat to quality of interaction. In addition, these days most people are addicted the high-tech gadgets and spend long hours surfing the net which leaves them with little time to communicate face-to-face. This in turn can develop a sense of isolation among individuals.
To conclude, in my personal opinion, although using the internet and smartphones might have some disadvantages, the merits are far more. It is not only bring a faster and easier connection for people, but also boost their social interactions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...hat there are advantages for the people who are tend to use the smartphones and interne...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...e are advantages for the people who are tend to use the smartphones and internet for...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'jeopardize'
Suggestion: jeopardize
...ional conversations. This in turn would jeopardizes intimacy in relationships between peopl...
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Line 4, column 20, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
... among individuals. To conclude, in my personal opinion, although using the internet and smartp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, in addition, such as, as well as, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38650306748 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04026574131 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613496932515 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6327727607 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.066666667 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7333333333 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197414642593 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578486095741 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0275439178697 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101050819936 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393267924162 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.