Wealth and material belongings often measure the success that a person has. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?
The success of people is often measured by their richness and by the things they own. However, I am inclined to believe that wealth is not the best success measure as there are other more relevant and non-materialistic factors which determine one’s successfulness, including their career achievements and attitude to other people. I also believe that the key factor of success is one’s level of happiness.
I believe that while being wealthy makes one quite successful in particular area, wealthiness overall cannot be considered as a relevant measure of success. In other words, although being rich can help avoid particular issues in one’s life, it is not enough to be accounted for successful individual, as there are more important non-materialistic factors, such as being able to work for self-development and not simply for money. What is more, I believe that a successful person is one who has managed to take under control their emotions and is nice towards other people. To illustrate, richness is something that can be simply inherited without having made any effort. In contrary, being kind to others or doing a job that brings joy is something that requires a lot of effort, thus, these factors are more relevant to success measurement.
Furthermore, in my opinion, a successful person is made of happiness. To put it simple, only a happy person, who has
eventually achieved harmony with others and themselves, can be considered successful. To illustrate, a person filled with happiness is able to achieve whatever goal they may put ahead themselves, thus, happiness comes along with success; unlike some other factors such as money or fame, which only are variables and temporary things that cannot guarantee any success at all.
To conclude, people’s success if often measured by the amount of money they have. However, I believe that although money can bring particular benefits, such as proper education and ability to purchase high quality goods, wealthiness itself cannot be a relevant measure of success since at times it can be inherited and not gained by putting effort, thus some rich people have not done anything to become wealthy, and it goes without saying that only a person who achieved some goals in life being hard-working and thorough can be considered successful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
... it simple, only a happy person, who has eventually achieved harmony with others ...
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...cannot guarantee any success at all. To conclude, people's success if ofte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, so, thus, while, in particular, such as, in my opinion, in other words, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 13.1623246493 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1954.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21066666667 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94682473181 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.40049823 49.4020404114 225% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 150.307692308 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8461538462 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.30769230769 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274373002531 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128586101647 0.084324248473 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706153385116 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17472936971 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487666884926 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.53 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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