When compared to the past, children these days spend more of their leisure time indoors with computers and TV and less time outdoors.
Describe some of the problems this lack of outdoor leisure time can cause and suggest at least one possible solution.
Latest technology breakthrough and plummet prices allow close to every single household to equip with a television and computer. It is noticeable high proportion of adolescences select to stay indoors comparative to the past, the drawbacks of such should not be neglected.
Obesity is one major negative impact to the lifestyle of current children in modern developed countries. Combination of their consumption of unhealthy fast food with staying indoors to play computer games or watching television, lead to imbalance of intake and energy output and causing obesity. A general lack of exercise prevents the physical and mental development of children. Being fat, not only has health impact such as aspiratory sickness and degraded heart condition, but together impacting mental health especially with self-doubting around peers, indirectly increasing pressure.
A more frequent reporting of juveniles falls unconscious during the night and lead to serious health issues have been related to obsessive with computer games. Moreover, watching television is a passive activity, there are no engagement of critical thinking and communication, imperilling the cognitive, physical and mental development.
There are different ways to enforce younger generations to attend extra curriculum outdoor activities. First, mandatory physical education lesson of twice per week at school would help improve health. Secondly, education system could impose a point system on volunteer activities, a higher score could have a chance on school fee subsidy, this could encourage children to engage with the society, understanding others and self awareness.
Encouraging and guidance from parents to younger generation to live a healthy life is essential in reducing the negative impact of pre-occupied in stationary activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ' the Latest'.
Suggestion: The Latest
Latest technology breakthrough and plummet pri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 7.30460921844 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 3.0 24.0651302605 12% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.86466165414 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03552747394 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.68045112782 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1832100323 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112099308094 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0376221015831 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.027471213376 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0502176303361 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311280565163 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.71 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.6 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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