A/D? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole
Nobody can deny that every country looks forward to reach the best economic, political and social condition. In this regard, some people are inclined toward the opinion that old, experienced workers can help this process to happen in the future while I believe that young people can be more effective in the countries' decisions and future because their knowledge is up to date, they are physically and mentally in good condition, and they are ambitious enough to follow their wishes.
As a result of technological advances which requires a broad, up to date knowledge to deal with, lifestyle and working methods have changed by leaps and bounds. Hence, knowledgeable people are the most suitable and effective ones for deciding about the important issues in the country. Old people are experienced but they do not have enough information about new technologies but young people are the ones who invent new technologies and are able to use them in the society. For example, young people are familiar with computers, know how to work with them to speed up their duties or archive and find their documents, and know how to keep pace with other countries by using the new inventions effectively.
Physical and mental conditions are important contributory factors to make proper decisions in some working positions. Most important influential positions in a country should be occupied by the youth because young people are able to cope with difficult situations better than the elderly. It is not a surreptitious fact that the pressure in the job environment has dramatically increased. So it is impossible for old people to tolerate these difficulties which forces them to retire as soon as it is possible. For instance, a minister who travels a lot to supervise the performance of the dependent organizations has to be healthy and powerful enough to endure immense fatigue.
The last but not least reason that makes the young people appropriate as the most effective people on the future of a society as a whole is their ambition. Old people has reached their goals in part but young people are ambitious enough to follow their aims and to find the best ways to achieve them. I can give my co-worker as an example. When our company schedules an appointment, the clerks gather together to decide on how to improve the company's condition but he does not use his experience to help because he is going to get retired next few months. All clerks know that the more the company progresses, the more its benefit will be and consequently, the more the clerks' income will become. Hence, the youths' ambition and desire to better job environment and more income lead them to be more active and help to find the best solutions for the company.
In general, although the elderly are experienced, young people can be more effective in making decisions in a society. In fact, broad knowledge of new technologies, healthy bodies, and eagerness to progress and to reach their goals will make the young people the most influential ones in a society's future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 14, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'not the least'.
Suggestion: not the least
...endure immense fatigue. The last but not least reason that makes the young people appr...
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Line 7, column 671, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'clerks'' or 'clerk's'?
Suggestion: clerks'; clerk's
... will be and consequently, the more the clerks income will become. Hence, the youths a...
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Line 7, column 709, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youths'' or 'youth's'?
Suggestion: youths'; youth's
...e clerks income will become. Hence, the youths ambition and desire to better job envir...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'hence', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'in general', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.20652173913 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.161231884058 0.158761421928 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.134057971014 0.0866891130778 155% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0471014492754 0.046263068375 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0489130434783 0.0685040099705 71% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0942028985507 0.118717715034 79% => OK
Participles: 0.0217391304348 0.0351676179071 62% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.74899828613 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0525362318841 0.0309702414327 170% => OK
Particles: 0.0036231884058 0.00188951952338 192% => OK
Determiners: 0.0978260869565 0.0887237588012 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0163043478261 0.0209618222197 78% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.018115942029 0.0139019557991 130% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3045.0 2387.08602151 128% => OK
No of words: 512.0 408.028673835 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.947265625 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.36328125 0.338922669872 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.2578125 0.251872472559 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.1875 0.174417080927 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.1328125 0.112833075102 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74899828613 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470703125 0.524397521467 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.7058974114 59.2087087015 92% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.9473684211 20.5533526081 131% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.4870803687 48.84282405 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.263157895 120.699889404 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9473684211 20.5533526081 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.684210526316 0.644075263715 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 52.7286184211 45.7405998639 115% => OK
Elegance: 1.25352112676 1.45489161554 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318783508665 0.300154397459 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130115635452 0.103427244359 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0807404563438 0.0752933317313 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.555688337772 0.497263757937 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.16518749755 0.151897553556 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144404976669 0.114077575197 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985990917211 0.0781384742642 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.438822969399 0.336927656856 130% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0303840920047 0.067059652881 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224827580786 0.210909579961 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440488350446 0.0618886996521 71% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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