Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site. Use specific reasons and examples
The advent of new technology affects human’s life significantly. Although they might provide many advantages for people we could not ignore some of their drawbacks like their negative effects that they are on the educational process of students. I completely agree with the opinion that technology like cell phones, online games, and social networking service made the process of education of students harder than the past. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on arguments to support my view.
The first point to be mentioned is that using this technology take a lot of time and students won’t have enough time for doing their tasks. Nowadays, a lot of applications in the cell phone are available for interacting in the virtual world with an attractive program, so, no one can resist to this interesting and fascinating world. Result in, everyone is a member of at least one social network, so one has to dedicate a lot of time to check these services. For example in my country students spend much time in Instagram to share their luxurious possessions and trip with others. I think it is really time- consuming. They allocate their study and sleep time for surfing in the webs.
Another reason that deserves some words is that online programs often time, include violence and inappropriate content that occupied the student’s mind, so it would have devastating consequences. Accessing the internet caused students due to their curiosity search for some topics that cannot proper for them. For instance, some sites contain sexual videos, violent behavior and this content influence their thought, as a result, they could not concentrate on their educational tasks. Many researchers showed that the rate of crime is increasing among students in age school. If they are not under control, they might involve in dangerous crime and create a lot of difficulties for their families and definitely, all of these will have a negative impact on their education.
By the way of conclusion, base on the arguments above I am of the opinion that the student educating is really hard today because they spend a lot of time in their cell phone’s applications or even search the violence and unsuitable content that captured their mind and prevent them to focus on their learning process.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to focus on their learning process.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, really, so, as to, at least, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11873350923 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79217763469 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55672823219 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.9415230014 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.25 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6875 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205637435241 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068295918133 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579987967066 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13171439537 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409587786463 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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