Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Nowadays, communities are full of the enjoyable things such as canoeing, hunting and educating; unlike, ancient societies, enjoyable things applied to the living and also supplying life stokes. In our societies, anybody easily selects one of the enjoyable materials. I disagree with this statement that points out in following.
First, everybody in our societies freely (optional) chooses the career or the major who pleasured to doing this actions. When we want to select a major in university, this is whole freely choice without any obliging; so, in continue we pleasure form this choice and that is one of the personal enjoyment-doing things that we should be doing. For examples when we should be taken homework which are pleasurable materials for us because owing to our progress and any progress is the enjoyable thing.
Second, in our societies, everybody has a special plan for everything in her/his life, and also institutes and companies have the special deadline for completion of tasks; so, peoples can’t be pursued (following) enjoyment-doing things rather than doing things they should do. Everybody in each morning goes to the office to do duties that are related to his major so this duties done with pleasure. As for me, I studied electrochemistry major in university and I followed a special program. I had went laboratory from 8 am to 8 pm each morning and work my project. In spite of, should be doing it that was very enjoyable for me
All in all, an optional choice leads to enjoyable-doing work or pleasure from our lives. Everybody freely chooses the situation in the life or the work, as result get pleasure from doing that. In the other words, I think, in communities, people have to do some works but they pleasure dong those.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 106, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...eer or the major who pleasured to doing this actions. When we want to select a major...
^^^^
Line 3, column 371, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...duties that are related to his major so this duties done with pleasure. As for me, I...
^^^^
Line 3, column 631, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... doing it that was very enjoyable for me All in all, an optional choice leads to ...
^^^
Line 4, column 32, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'lead'?
Suggestion: lead
...for me All in all, an optional choice leads to enjoyable-doing work or pleasure fro...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, as for, for example, i think, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1467.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 294.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98979591837 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86106185712 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547619047619 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.965250808 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.846153846 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6153846154 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358370665813 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122592818738 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980069119233 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207729063853 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803428609908 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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