Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for people to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, instead of staying in their home communities for their whole lives.
I support the idea of people moving out from their hometowns because it encourages them to grow, mature and become better as adults.
When we are kids, we have needs we have to meet in order to develop healthy and safely. That is why, usually, our parents keep us in certain environment as we age. Nevertheless, as we grow older, we must face the difficulties of responsability and the dangers of life. To grow means to commit mistakes and to learn lessons that will give us the strenght to confront everyday problems. By living in another place that is not where you lived in our childhood, you force yourself to go through situations you do not know and harden your character by confronting them. For example: when a teenager goes on exchange to another country, he or she not only learns a new language but finds a new way of relating to other people. They must face with situations alone, as well as a distinct cultural and social environment.
In order for a person to mature, it is necessary to go to a process of change, challange and uncertainty. By going through complications outside our comfort zone, we become the improved version of ourselves. Also, when we face circumstances where there is no one else to help us and our response needs to be fast, we will certainly look for the courage within ourselves to overcome them. That is what I call maturity. To be the best side of our personality. An example of this is when you move away from your parents and realize that you are now on your own to sign a rent contract, to pay bills and to clean after yourself. This process of change is the best way to become a functional adult.
In conclusion, staying in their home communities is for people who do not want to grow up, develop and get better.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... them to grow, mature and become better as adults. When we are kids, we have ne...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, nevertheless, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54231974922 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67329938718 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567398119122 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8527365167 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5625 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9375 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1875 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227203894328 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655650011907 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0946759791077 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195009230946 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112250596101 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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