Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People nowadays are very busy doing different things. Although some believe multi-tasking increases peoples capability and potential due to being active in different areas, others believe differently and disagree with that. I personaly think being very busy reduces the accuracy of performance and trough the following paragraphs delineate it.
First of all, human’s brain has a limit for concentration. Researchers found evidence that support this idea. They evaluated different school kids and by increasing the number of task at a limited time, the accuracy declined. This shows people can not concentrate well when their task increases.
Moreover, some task need cerebellar activity and some need cerebral activity which means every task need specific focus of the brain. However for cerebellar activity doing and practicing a lot is very crucial to do them well for cerebral activity focus and concentration is essential. For example, driving a car and talking with others can be done by more practice automaticly but solving a math question and listening to the music and singing at the same time is imposible . In fact , our brain needs time to focus on each of them separately. Therefore, multitasking can make less focus for every particular task.
Lastly, people are different and we can not apply this rule to every body. Eventhough, some are very intelligent and do their job very accurate in the stress time ,some completely lost their focus and not do their best. For example, in many big restaurants and companies most of the personals are very trained and multipotential but in the case of overcrowding they loose their mind and can not serve their best.
In conclusion, Although some believe multitasking reduces the waste of time and helps to do lots of task in a limited time, I think it reduces the correctness and accuracy of the task . People become careless when they do lots of things in a very short time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 135, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... task need specific focus of the brain. However for cerebellar activity doing and pract...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...nd singing at the same time is imposible . In fact , our brain needs time to focus...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...eir job very accurate in the stress time ,some completely lost their focus and not...
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Line 4, column 366, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...al but in the case of overcrowding they loose their mind and can not serve their best...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun task seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of tasks'.
Suggestion: lots of tasks
...duces the waste of time and helps to do lots of task in a limited time, I think it reduces t...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...the correctness and accuracy of the task . People become careless when they do lot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, lastly, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1167192429 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82486172228 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529968454259 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9587372992 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4117647059 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6470588235 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229593344043 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858221104364 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0970535842581 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138283107792 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622740410635 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.