TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

In the lecture, the professor makes a series of points that could solve the problems presented in the passage about impossibility of living in venus.He states living in venus converse to the reading passage is certainly possible.
First of all, he points out increased atmospheric pressure of the venus which the passage says is 90 times greater than earth could be solved by making stations, floating in the venus atmosphere 50 kilometers away.In this distance the atmosphere pressure would be equal to earth and there would be no danger to the stations.
Also, the professor states eventhough there are not any water or oxygen in venus surface but there are lots of carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid in the atmosphere as the reading states. So by making chemical reactions in stations they can make water and oxygen out of this chemical reactions and use them.Therfore, there is no need to import water and oxygen to survive.
Lastly, the author claims little sunlight reaches the venus surface due to thick cloud . The speaker states it is true but by making stations 50 km above the surface the cloud above the stations would be less.Also station can use cloud reflection of sun to make energy and use them in their stations.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
... about impossibility of living in venus.He states living in venus converse to the ...
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Line 2, column 214, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: In
...the venus atmosphere 50 kilometers away.In this distance the atmosphere pressure w...
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Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therfore
...of this chemical reactions and use them.Therfore, there is no need to import water and o...
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Line 4, column 26, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n to survive. Lastly, the author claims little sunlight reaches the venus surfa...
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Line 4, column 43, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...stly, the author claims little sunlight reaches the venus surface due to thick c...
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Line 4, column 89, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...hes the venus surface due to thick cloud . The speaker states it is true but by ma...
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Line 4, column 211, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
... cloud above the stations would be less.Also station can use cloud reflection of sun...
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Line 4, column 211, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... cloud above the stations would be less.Also station can use cloud reflection of sun...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, lastly, so, first of all, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 12.0772626932 17% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 22.412803532 45% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1024.0 1373.03311258 75% => OK
No of words: 209.0 270.72406181 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8995215311 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.543427794 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 145.348785872 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531100478469 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 318.6 419.366225166 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 21.2450331126 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.3653772105 49.2860985944 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.666666667 110.228320801 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.8333333333 21.698381199 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310641993204 0.272083759551 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1527511143 0.0996497079465 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621878743017 0.0662205650399 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179124134041 0.162205337803 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649701019975 0.0443174109184 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 13.3589403974 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 53.8541721854 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.0289183223 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 63.6247240618 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.498013245 149% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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