Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by raha525 on Sat, 02/10/2018 - 18:35

In today’s modern world, advertisement is the mainstay of each company’s economic growth. Different companies, without taking into account the kind of products and also their consumers situation, drastically striving to surmount their rivals by different methods of advertising which make their products more appealing for their consumer. Among all advertising target groups, young children (especially aged two to five) seem to be by far, the most susceptible targets of ads. Therefore, There has been a heated debate as to whether they should be targeted by TV program advertising or not. I, personally, believe it would be controversial (a dramatic one).if children are targeted as an advertising massage via television. The reason behind this thesis will be aptly elaborated in the following paragraphs.
It goes without saying that, human being has innate inclination toward attractive commodities, they have desired for everything which gives them a sense of satisfaction, for instance, more tasty foods, precious jewelry, exquisite fragrances and attractive colors in different eras. Nowadays, with this rapid growth of technologies, the diversity of these fascinating things has increased and advertisement is a pivotal strategy to inform people about this variety. Hence, advertisers utilize their instinctive penchant toward more appealing things tempting their customers to buy more products. They attempt to prove their commodities are invaluable, healthier, more qualified, more elegant, more picturesque or just newer, even they are not. Although, adult consumers might be able to understand the differences between deceiving massages of advertisers and the real value of those products but children aged five or younger certainly have no ability to perceive this momentous point and assume it should be trustful and since a plethora of them watch children’s television programs it will affect their mind adversely. As an illustration, Imagen a TV program is advertising a new toy or a new food by showing a public cartoon character, which children in that age love it, is using it. That should be a considerable reason for children to beguile and want to buy that product and since they normally make second-split decisions and usually tip the scales in favor of buying them, they start to badger their parents preparing that product for them, no matter if it is an unhealthy food or an unqualified toy. Furthermore, if their parents cannot control them and they achieve those things, it may pose a threat for their health mentally or physically. In essence, the more children (who are not able to recognize selling massages) are exposed via TV advertising massage, the less their parents are able to control them and the more they hurt themselves.

Accordingly, it should be stressed that selling massages which aimed at children are dangerous for their health. Some products, for example fighting toys, which stimulate them to fight with each other, will influence their behavior adversely and make them more aggressive and also result in more crime in the society in the future. Another example which deserves some words here is about toys which are ready-to-use and children may tend to use them but these toys restrict their chance to show their ability and constrain their creativity. Nevertheless, these dangerous toys are advertising by TV programs.

Another equally salient point which is referred children health as well, but in a different way is related to advertising unhealthy food those are more appealing for children than healthy home-made food. Undoubtedly, there is a super tight connection between a healthy diet and having a healthy body. Unfortunately, Obesity, high blood sugar and tooth decay in children have been increasing just because of eating unhealthy food. However, one of the most striking reasons of them is advertising them via TV.

In conclusion, if we need a healthier society in future, it is crucial to be a control on children-marketing and advertising massages which are received by them. Otherwise next damages will be inevitable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 528, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...erefore, There has been a heated debate as to whether they should be targeted by TV program a...
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Line 6, column 78, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...s referred children health as well, but in a different way is related to advertising unhealthy foo...
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Line 8, column 47, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...clusion, if we need a healthier society in future, it is crucial to be a control on child...
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Line 8, column 163, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...ng massages which are received by them. Otherwise next damages will be inevitable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3466.0 1977.66487455 175% => OK
No of words: 643.0 407.700716846 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39035769829 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03561760524 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98547899107 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 329.0 212.727598566 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51166407465 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 1062.9 618.680645161 172% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.7182639048 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.64 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.72 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165096420345 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560547591097 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427737208914 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103574735209 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376747006649 0.0645574589148 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 176.0 86.8835125448 203% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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