Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
relatives are the most important things in our life. However, In today's world, life becomes more complicated than ever before. therefore, I agree that people tend to have fewer family members and live with there own small family members. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.
first of all, In today's modern world, live expenses and responsibility increased astronomically. people nowadays have to work more hours, furthermore, they have less leisure time even for themselves. As a result, their attention to have kids and being connected with their relatives coming to disappear. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. Ten years ago when I was living in my grandparent's house, we were three families, my family and two uncles with there children and wives. the house was active and fulfillment of joy and excitement. After my grandparents died, we moved everyone with his family to live separately; Consequently, we missed each other and we couldn't gather even in big holidays everybody live with his own problems and responsibility.
Moreover, Individuals now try to make a study and calculation for their live expenses before making the decision for having children. Everything is counting for taking a risk if they did not use the right measurements. therefore, the family branch became less and the connections between them vanish. I noticed this, especially in a hight developed country. because parents have to take care of their kids and relatives from a different perspective, such as, educationally and healthy. On the other hand, for instance, I born and lived in libya, which the education and health organization supported and granted by the government. As a result, the majority of families are larger and extended in a myriad way. For example, the average for the number of family members in libya around six to seven-person which is quite high compared with other communities in a different part of the world.
In conclusion, I believe of the increasingly demanding and needs in this modern life is one of the main causes of having less extending family members. Also is depends on which part of this world we lived in and raised.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06575342466 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91823908324 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575342465753 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7840646792 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0476190476 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.380952381 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61904761905 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140427729415 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407675288543 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030941819347 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0873947377398 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202973071696 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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