Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When being asked whether entertainers and athletes generate a greater impact on young people rather they are to older people, the response will be a boilerplate answer, yes. In fact, it illustrates what kind of role these celebrities play in young people's minds. I would further provide several reasons to substantiate my statement.
First of all, young people are subjected to peer pressure, and nowadays there are a lot of teenagers are prone to focus on celebrities' lives. Take my sister's experience as an example. As a high school student, her classmates and she always loves to watch how a famous YouTuber dress colorfully. They have been so fascinated with her that they bought every single clothes that she had wore before. However, if a girl in their class do not dress in this fashionable style, then they will start to tease her as an out-dated woman, and even isolate her. Therefore, in order to be accepted in their social networks, youngsters will be influenced by celebrities a lot even though they actually do not want to be.
Secondly, young people are so young that they do not possess their values, and entertainers always spread their values to the public. For example, my brother always watches a TV program whose host usually display his political point of view on it. As a person who is eager to be smart, my brother always copies the host's words and starting to present his speech to others. On the contrary, when my father sees the program, he will definitely criticize what the aggressive entertainer said on the screen since he had already had fertile social experience which makes him readily analyzing all the situation in his way. Therefore, it is evident that those who are still immature are more likely be impacted by public celebrities.
Last but not least, young people place emphasis on reputation, and celebrities always seem to enjoy their renown happily. To illustrate such idea, my cousin's experience can be cited as an instance. When she was a teenager, her definition of success was directly related to being famous. Therefore, she always read a stack of fashion magazines and imitating how they dress since she thought, in this way, the prettiest woman in the campus would be her. On the contrary, my aunt who has been an adult, think the most successful thing in the world is to witness her two lovely kids becoming prominent adults. Apparently, youngsters are more possibly to be influenced by entertainer because of their definition of reputation.
To conclude, young people are more likely to be influenced by those who presented on the screen rather than older people. After all, young people place emphasis on peer pressure, lack of values and reputation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'worn'.
Suggestion: worn
...ought every single clothes that she had wore before. However, if a girl in their cla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, apparently, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, after all, for example, in fact, kind of, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94310722101 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67500794239 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540481400438 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9698829446 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.681818182 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7727272727 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136345915339 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431213199536 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391040948788 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.091893132111 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347835517752 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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