Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
people always say that young people will play a big part in the society's future, and it is important for the society to listen to the voice of young generations. however, I agree that young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
First, young people are mostly students, and students are generally busy and focus on school's studies. Most of students are given a lot of assignments to do, papers to read; also, they have to take care of themselves in the daily life. For example, when I was in college, I had above 20 credits each semester. Each course required me to put a lot of effort and time to learn; therefore, it was impossible for me to read newspaper or watch TV news to know the important issues the society was discussing. For this reason, I totally agree that young people like me have little influence on the important decisions to determine the future of a society
Second, some people may say that young people can discuss and influence the society through the internet, while the older people can not do so. however, young people today are still minor number of the users on the internet because everyone now has a cellphone can reach to the social media. For example, people today leave comments down on Facebook's politic news videos; I notice that those people are mostly mid-age, while young people are more likely to pay attention to funny things, like comedy videos. therefore, I think young people today still have no influence on the important decisions than older people.
To conclude, although young people activate on the social media more often, they still play a minor part in important issues on the internet. also, young people are busy doing academic things; it means they have little time to pay attention to other things. therefore, I strongly agree that young people have no influence on the important decisions to determine the future of a society as a whole.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, while, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80058651026 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43767523647 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448680351906 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.6038396358 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.923076923 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2307692308 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375064050675 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176335080675 0.076458572812 231% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167792150892 0.0737576698707 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28166419842 0.150856017488 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0823679654565 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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