Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Nowadays, it is crystal clear that the young people can better decision making about their life than it was in the past. In this regard, there are different sectors that pave the way of the young people in the future. To this end, some people believe that youth are better capable to make a decision about their own life without their parents, while other people do not believe so. As far as I am concerned, today's, verity and diversity in some aspects of the lifestyle led to able children to making decision independent. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
First, in the modern world, advanced technology has dramatically revolutionized all aspects of an individual’s life, among of them young people is the most important parts of this challenge. To put in other words, invent new devices and electrical tools such as computers and smartphones are the base of human life and people can learn a lot of things by using these devices. For example, I remember when I was a student university at one of the best university in our country, University of Tehran, I wanted to select the professional field of my study. In this regard, the internet, social networks, and academic news were really helpful in my decision to elevate selection performance. Now, I am a successful person in my job and I have a high academic position. As a result, if I had not used a computer and high tech devices, I would not be able to reach this level.
Second, improving and increasing the communications between people led to enhance the quality of decision in youth life. To do so, people can consult with expert persons in every field. For instance, I remember when I was a student university I wanted to begin a new job in the novel area of mechanical engineering science. Therefore, I have done a lot of researches to find the best solution. After a lot of attempts, I succeed to link with one of the famous professors in this area and he has helped me to improve my idea. Now, I have a huge company that related to my novel idea. In fact, if I had not accessed to international communication, I would not be capable to establish my company.
In conclusion, apart from what was mentioned above, there are several reasons for which I subscribe to the idea it is better for young people to make the decision by themselves to pave the way of future success. Thus, not only new technologies and social network but also the international relationship between people can improve the success opportunity through young people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 376, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ccess opportunity through young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, therefore, thus, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7264573991 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86000236105 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502242152466 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6072864003 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.4 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335175199251 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091624269145 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105241076657 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211533187961 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133708597466 0.0645574589148 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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