Do you agree or disagree?Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

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Do you agree or disagree?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

Submitted by Ahmad_Amz on Thu, 07/25/2019 - 07:58

Nowadays, it is crystal clear that the government’s investment in different sectors of society and economics play a key role in the nation's welfare and prosperity. In this regard, some people believe that governments should spend more money in support of the arts, while others do not believe so. As far as I am concerned, governments should allocate more money for athletics and sports. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
First, in the modern era, one of the most critical factors in the human's life is a healthy and balanced body, which governmental supports play a vital role in this situation. To put it in other words, governments with investment in different sections of the society such as sports and creating some building structures can improve social health. For example, I remember when I was a university student at one of the best university in our country, University of Tehran, our university had a huge and fantastic hall for playing volleyball game, since the government supports and budget just allocated to our university. Thus, I decided to participate in the volleyball team of the university. After a while, I can enhance my health and quit smoking. As a result, if the government had not allocated some grants for building the hall, I would not be able to empower my health.
Second, in today's world, there are several reasons in the human’s being life to have not enough free time and they should assign more time for mental health and relaxation for stress relief, which governments can help people to have a fantastic time alongside their family. To be more specific, governmental policies to creation some places such as parks, swimming pools, and enjoyment places can increase the mental health in society. For instance, once when I was a university student I had a huge engineering project and my schedule was jammed. Thus, I had a lot of boring works and I was extremely angered for this condition. Therefore, I decided to go to the park with my friends and I had a lot of fun time to hang out with my friends, which makes me feel better about myself. After too many attempts, the project was done as well as I established a tremendous company based on the project and I have been a successful person now. In fact, had the government not allocate some budget for building the parks, I would not be capable of a successful person now.
In conclusion, apart from what was mentioned above, there are several other reasons for which I subscribe to the idea that government should spend more money to support the sports. Thus, not only does it help people to enrich physical health, but also it enhances the mental health of society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ty and economics play a key role in the nations welfare and prosperity. In this regard,...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 67, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...one of the most critical factors in the humans life is a healthy and balanced body, wh...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2250.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82832618026 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77611748147 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476394849785 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7531575152 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.421052632 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5263157895 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21052631579 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159318500322 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529842465043 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763222498562 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129626465299 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771364052466 0.0645574589148 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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