Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that people wish to obtaining spectacular wealth and fame by forcing themselves to involve in as much as possible different works were not really successful. Conversely, it creates a lot of social and health problems for humankind. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that today people who are able to handle many different activities together are only people who would have a successful life in the future, because different skills can help them for promotion in their job. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that because people are busy doing many different things, they do very few things well.
First and foremost, today most of the important projects include several numbers of scientists with different experts. The prominent scientists in each field are people who are specialized in deeply understanding of one specific notion, not study a wide variety of knowledge. The large scale of projects is out of that one person to be afforded to handle it. So, focus on one area and some few kinds of stuff, would be more effective in people success than learning a variety of them.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that human has limited physical and mental capability. Today, some people become overwhelmed and helpless in trying to do a lot of works in the same period of time. When they fail, it was caused to depression and anxiety for them. For example, last year, my uncle had a heart attack because he worked for more than 20 hours during a day, drank coffee and smoked a lot. In addition, the census show that drug abuse and obesity is higher in people with this type of beliefs and lifestyle.
Finally, yet importantly, busy people do not spend enough time with their children. These children present in the higher risk of problems, such as social defense and criminal behaviors. While we know that one of the most important factors in determining people success is their appropriate role in caring for and loving their children.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that people should not busy themselves to do many different things together. Because of the limitation of human abilities, and specialization of jobs and the importance of family and social relationship that harm with overworking.
- TPO-39- In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. 71
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? 70
- TPO 47 3
- TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 73
- The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Do you agree or disagree? 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 373, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...hat today people who are able to handle many different activities together are only people who...
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Line 1, column 626, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...idea that because people are busy doing many different things, they do very few things well. ...
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Line 5, column 218, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...trying to do a lot of works in the same period of time. When they fail, it was caused to depre...
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Line 9, column 112, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...people should not busy themselves to do many different things together. Because of the limitat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, first, however, if, really, so, still, well, while, for example, in addition, such as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97727272727 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65690529572 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568181818182 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6132299876 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.5 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295681772986 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874824958994 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151754153538 0.0737576698707 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154719419531 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933741460562 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.