Having new friends.
Almost everyone agrees that a true friend is the one who overlooks your failure and celebrates your success. From my perspective, having new friends is crucial rather than just keeping old friends. I feel this way for many reasons, which I will develop in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, it is without a shadow of a doubt, having new friends is necessary when you are abroad so they can assist you in any difficult situations. In fact, I have experienced an episode in my life that can relate to what I mean. Five years ago, I traveled the U.S alone without my family and I started working as a pharmacy technician in Walgreens. Everything was new, starting from the language, the system, and the people's culture. Fortunately, I met Jessica, my coworker, she was awesome and pretty kind. She was a true friend, and she helped me understanding everything until I absorbed all the work and became excellent. If I had not met Jessica, my new friend in the U.S, I would not have succeeded in my job.
Secondly, making a new friendship widening our horizon because new friends certainly will be from different background and different view points. My brother's experience is compelling evidence for what I mean. My brother, Kevin, was obsessed with ancient pharaonic culture. When he traveled Egypt, he met a new friend there. My brother's new friend, Sammy, was also admiring the ancient Egyptian culture and his major was about this topic. Sammy told Kevin everything he wanted to know and they bacame a close friends even after Kevin come back to his country.
It can be summed up in accentuating that have new company is more beneficial because they can help you to excel in your work when you were abroad and alone. Also, person can gain new knowledge from new friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...not met Jessica, my new friend in the U.S, I would not have succeeded in my job. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, i feel, i mean, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7928802589 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64563057312 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57928802589 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0019771766 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.2777777778 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1666666667 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.427936391357 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134692657019 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118152430599 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263448708081 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305883384395 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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