how would you spend the money if you were a government official?
Problems have been with people since their birth day to their dead day. But, the significant part is that how we solve them. Governments have had mistaken and making problem since I remember. Especially our government. But two of them are the most remarkable ones. Than we do need to work on them little bit.
Since our country has been the land of war it is natural to have broken and not cemented but, some of streets in this land is like somebody intentionally punished the streets. As an example, the streets of Herat city. And definitely luge amount of this money souled be used in this way. And the government has to spend not only this money but also, more than this on this significant issue.
Even making a look to the places like Afghanistan makes people cry. While they are out of it and talking about it cannot be as tough as living in it. But what if they come inside and make a look to how these miserable people live. Even thinking about this issue might make them feel terrible. In this country there are people who are speculating what to eat at night. And there are boys and girls not even knowing what the throw meaning of living is. Then absolutely it is needed to spend the half of that money on these people. If you look at this statement it might look really cliché but in fact, it’s the realist fact.
As a final remark, we can genially say that this money should be used on these kind hearted but, needy people. Slowly but surely the society is changing and we can remark like this that some years later people are going to notice to point that help these people instead of spending money in the ways that are not necessary so, this point make us feel more confident. But at least there is a hope.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, really, so, then, while, as to, at least, in fact, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39252336449 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.15925383224 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523364485981 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.1089063374 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.1428571429 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2857142857 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04761904762 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111339265118 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0300495503253 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039831385961 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0623899630852 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0142442756018 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.59 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.84 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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