If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying
Nowadays, having a decent and well-paid job is very imperative for people. In this regard, they have faced a plethora of job positions that they need to choose a better one. Regarding the importance of job circumstance, a controversial question that arises is whether people choose a secure job right away when have been proposed to them or they have to wait to job that are more satisfying. I personally concur the second groups' notion, and I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, people spend most of their time in their workspace, so having a job that they are interested is very crucial for their progress. Although, individuals strive to prepare a better circumstance for their family by the salary that they receive from their jobs, it is very vital they satisfy with their jobs to motivate them for progress and promotion. The more interest in works that ones have done the more chance to get promotion. On the other hand, if people choose jobs that are not like, and they choose that because of their needs, they will be bored and reluctant to increase their chance to being successful and using the time that they spend in work place. Furthermore, it is possible if they cannot endure this unwilling situation, they will quit from their jobs and look for other jobs that they are reluctant.
In addition, people will lose the some superior options if they choose a secure job in first glance. Nowadays, they are a numerous job positions in most decent companies. Therefore, if people say yes to their first options, they will lose the chance to take upcoming job opportunities. For instance, imagine a person who has a good background in computer programing. After graduation from his university, he has received one job option from his professor. He must in his company but his company is very new. This is a secure and ready option for him but if he accept this he will not this chance to attend well-known companies such as Google and Yahoo.
To summarize, contemplating all the aforementioned remarks, we reach the conclusion that it is far better for people to wait the jobs that would be more satisfying. Not only can they enhance their chance for progress in their profession, but also they can face better job options from well-known companies.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... other jobs that they are reluctant. In addition, people will lose the some s...
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...cure and ready option for him but if he accept this he will not this chance to attend ...
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... companies such as Google and Yahoo. To summarize, contemplating all the afor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82784810127 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6604451271 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470886075949 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9387020321 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.944444444 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9444444444 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27777777778 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396938135771 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139716169507 0.076458572812 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921597787776 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263589215651 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0647934682482 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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