if you want to change one thing about your hometown what would it be?
I live in a town, where the weather is really enjoyable for me. It is placed in an area where both sea and mountains have surrounded it. You can find a peaceful and attractive place by driving for just 15 minutes. In my opinion the region I live is perfect, but there are some problems in finding job for young generation who are living there. If one thing about my hometown was changeable, I would alter its management& budget system. The reason which support my idea are listed below.
First, although an industrial feature can harm the face of calmness of this city, but it is not deniable that young educated generation need profession to use their skills and information. Without job young people who are a big source of energy for development of the society may be led to depression and despair. Additionally lack of proper occupation cause residual of the town to migrate to big industrial cities. This phenomenon has many disadvantageous for both the industrial cities and towns. For example the capital of Iran is going to explode by the migrant people from all over the country who are seeking for jobs. And towns are remaining for old generations. In this way, people work in an unfamiliar place, where they have no sense of belonging, and they just work for the money they are paid.
Second, my hometown need development. It has a lot of potential like tourism industrial and natural environment which can bring money for the city if they were put in a right way. A good manager who is skilled in urban designing can change this town to a perfect place for visiting and enjoying. Aside from, in holy days many people from far and near places come to our region for enjoying the weather and natural views. But the impact of this days is just pollution for us. I think some rules for visitors should be legislated for well-being of our cities.
In conclusion, the most important thing that my hometown needs is good management and enough budget for providing profession for fresh young people who are educated to have responsibilities in different positions that bring about improvement for the town and lead to conducting variable supplies that exist in the area.
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- "when people succeed it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success". Do you agree or disagree?explain. 60
- if you want to change one thing about your hometown what would it be? 70
- "when people succeed it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success". Do you agree or disagree?explain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Additionally,
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...ing money for the city if they were put in a right way. A good manager who is skilled in urban...
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Suggestion: these
...er and natural views. But the impact of this days is just pollution for us. I think ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'well', 'for example', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248175182482 0.229887763892 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.148418491484 0.158761421928 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0997566909976 0.0866891130778 115% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0243309002433 0.046263068375 53% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0583941605839 0.0685040099705 85% => OK
Prepositions: 0.138686131387 0.118717715034 117% => OK
Participles: 0.0535279805353 0.0351676179071 152% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66836683456 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.021897810219 0.0309702414327 71% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0924574209246 0.0887237588012 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0170316301703 0.0209618222197 81% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0267639902676 0.0139019557991 193% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2176.0 2387.08602151 91% => OK
No of words: 379.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74142480211 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.308707124011 0.338922669872 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.229551451187 0.251872472559 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.160949868074 0.174417080927 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110817941953 0.112833075102 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66836683456 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540897097625 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 60.2883642093 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.95 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8159364565 48.84282405 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8 120.699889404 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.644075263715 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 41.9051451187 45.7405998639 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.90526315789 1.45489161554 131% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115531740764 0.300154397459 38% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0748905322598 0.103427244359 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0568572701375 0.0752933317313 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.458018277247 0.497263757937 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.173239010853 0.151897553556 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.045992353592 0.114077575197 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060002463196 0.0781384742642 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.371611465813 0.336927656856 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0834953929382 0.067059652881 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0861834628996 0.210909579961 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026025244269 0.0618886996521 42% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.