independent essay-TPO46
The ways we get to know a celebrity are differentiating. In the past, celebrities just showed on televisions, and we could not know them if we didn't have a TV at home. However, nowadays, the celebrities joined our lives through youtube, Instagram, blogs. we just need a cell phone, and we can know what happened on the celebrity this morning. The technology of the internet makes the entertainment environment totally different. generally speaking, I agree that the opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people. There are a number of factors at play, as I shall discuss below.
One of these factors is the ability to use the internet. The younger generation born in a society that the technology of information system went to mature. they knew how to use computers when they were children, so they are more accessible to the new paths that celebrities use, such as Facebook, IG, than the older generation. The probability people influence by celebrities is positively related to times that people see them. As regard, younger people have more chance to see the celebrity, so the probability is higher.
Second, young people usually imitate their role models. In the past, role models were usually teachers, parents, or other elders surrounding us. But now, technology lets us know famous people far from us easier. role models turn to celebrities, like youtubers, entertainers, and athletes.
- Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. 66
- Tpo46 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: We
...ives through youtube, Instagram, blogs. we just need a cell phone, and we can know...
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...y of information system went to mature. they knew how to use computers when they wer...
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'time'.
Suggestion: time
...by celebrities is positively related to times that people see them. As regard, younge...
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... know famous people far from us easier. role models turn to celebrities, like youtub...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1184.0 1977.66487455 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 231.0 407.700716846 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12554112554 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96900904531 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.619047619048 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 378.0 618.680645161 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.4860760204 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.0 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4375 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.3125 5.45110844103 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.88 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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