Independent TOEFL essay - TPO 1: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.

As studying has been part of our lives nowadays, scientists are trying to find better ways to optimize the quality of studying. In a research published in a newspaper named “Hamshahri”, they have mentioned the importance of social activities on students’ life. But the important question is whether it is worth of spending time and finance on it. From my point of view, I think it is one of the ways to increase the quality of education in universities and colleges for the following reasons: helps them to learn teamwork, to be healthy and learn about social life. In this essay, I will discuss the mentioned reasons.

First, being able to have social activities and doing sports helps students to learn teamwork. They get the chance to learn how to get along with others and be an effective part of a program. It makes them to realize how important it is to do their job as well as they are capable. For example, back in my days in university, I took part in events as project manager and I was responsible to monitor my team’s responsibilities. It made me realize the necessity of each and everyone’s presence in order to be successful as a team.

Second, taking time to do sports will help us to have a healthy body and mind. Therefore, it helps students to focus on their major better than those who do not take part. Doing sports also increases the rate of adrenaline in body, and it helps us to be more motivated and makes the brain more focused while doing our homework and researches.

Last but not least, it helps us to learn more about social life. The universities not only have the responsibility of teaching students about their field of studies but also they have to teach them how to be socialized and learn them the rules of communication which will have a major role in their future working life. As they have to learn how to be in touch with their boss, colleagues, etc.

To sum it up, I think sports and social activities are worth of investing in universities and colleges. It helps students to learn their subjects better and have a healthy lifestyle. It has a great impact in students’ life whether short term or even long term.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i think, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69948186528 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90642633174 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466321243523 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5662175484 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4736842105 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73684210526 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12109765799 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456653096824 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467155881601 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0764585499255 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177870609177 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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