Independent TOEFL essay -TPO 15: TPO 15: A/D? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
there is no shortage of opinion on the given topic. In my views, i am agree with the given statement. it is very important to manage money at young age in order to become financially responsible person. there are two major reasons which strenghthens my stand which i am going to discuss below.
First of all, As we grow older, we get to know every positive as well as negative consequences about how the money should be managed. In the sense, we experience lot of situations related to how the money should be handled. we make many mistakes, sometimes it happens that we spend money and afterwords we feel guilty about those expenses. this errors made during our childhood gives us timely lessons for money management. my personal experience is great example of this. When I was in 4th grade, I used to spent money on lottery tickets. Almost all the times i was losing the game and also i would not able to manage them in right way, one day i decided to quit purchasing that tickets and after than i was able to save my pocket money. it is said that experience makes man perfect. this quote also relatable to experience which we get for managing the money as well.
Second, if we learn to save money in our childhood, it becomes our habit in future too. also saving money can beneficial in many ways. one should learn to invest money in various sources like Banks, Fixed Deposits, Share Markets, etc. For better tomorrow, one should start investing the money straight from his childhood. many successful people invest their money in multiple sources and their aim is too multiply those invested money. For example, my uncle has started his business before 10 years. I asked them about how they reached the top level in the list of businessman. they simply told me that your saving is everything you have in your hand. if we can able to save money in our childhood, then it becomes our habit in future.
All in all, To be an ideal human being, it is most important to manage all the expenses during our childhood itself, The experiences makes us to be safe from negative instances and saving could help us in achieving future endeavors throughout our life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, then, well, for example, as well as, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61558441558 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45530256996 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553246753247 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.450421843 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.2608695652 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7391304348 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91304347826 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.5376344086 451% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146895656886 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474449695489 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730201398617 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0899739563988 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052073690834 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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