Parents give their children weekly money to buy whatever they want. Some people think this can cause bad habits and ideas about money in children. Others think the opposite. What’s your opinion?
Undoubtedly, we should learn many things when we are growing up, and learning about the role of money in our life is one of the vital issues which affects our life massively. Money which parents give their children provide them with a new attitude toward the financial issues. while some people think that children should not get money from their parents, others disagree. In my opinion, parents have to give their children some money weekly or monthly. In the following essay, I will elaborate on my reasons.
To begin with, with a define amount of money children will learn about the financial issues gradualluy. Since the money paly a vital role in our life, it is a fundemental thing that kids start dealing with that issue in a suitable level. By giving a specific amount of money regularly from aprents, children will be familiar with meaning of some indispensible concept like income, cost, saving and even being broken. To put it into perspecticve, when I was a student in middle school, my parents gave me five dollars every week to me to buy anything that I likled. At first, I had spent most of that on Monday and was broke for the rest of the week. Untill, my mother taught me how I should spend my money through five weekdays. In the next step, my father talked to me and helped me to learn the concept of saving, by giving me an example of his experience when he started working in the past and saved his salary to by a car. After that, I saved some of my money to buy my interesting book that I wanted at that year. That book, which I have kept that until know mean for me a world, because it was my first purchase through my financial planning.
Second, from psychology view, children have a sence of owernership through their life. It starts from early ages, and it is important for them to afford this inclination in a right way. Parents should give them a logical amonut of money as poket money to satisfy their sense of having something. This approach, giving kids money help them to grow up normally without any regret and sense of deprivation. Recently, I read an academic paper about the psychology of kids and relation with money. Data backs up this idea that children specially in this ear are more exposed to monetary issues and their sense about money has changed. The writer of the article concluded that parent should give their kids money regularly and supervise them to spend that.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that parents should give theirt children some amount of money regularly. This is because that this approach help them to understand the integral financial concept in their life and because the will raise with a normal emotional attitude toward money and ownership.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, while, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2239.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67432150313 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41336297506 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482254697286 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6247515363 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.347826087 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8260869565 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.17391304348 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331993415535 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114404558254 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095332593288 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231883287577 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072844160602 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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