People have a lot of opinions about the value of advanced education. Which do you think is the most important reason to attend college or university? Use reasons and examples to support your answer.
1. new experiences, 2. career preparation, 3. increased knowledge.
Use specific details and examples in your answer.
Personally, I feel that advanced education is a key to achieve a professional success. A career preparation leads the main reason of this thought, because we need being ready for the jobs opportunities around us. However, taking a high educational level, would give us better chances to get an excellent job.
Nowadays, the unemployment rate has been quite high and it is being more difficult to become employed. Indeed, finding a job could be a hard task, and if the person do not have a high education level, could be worst. However, here in Brazil (my native country), I have noticed that academic qualifications has worried people. They have realized that become necessary to have a graduate degree in order to begin a career. A couple of days ago, I was watching a TED Talk, that was discussing about how the actual employees has changed their interest about a professional profile. Now they are looking for people with a high level of qualification and the candidates who did not have a good one will be excluded.
Undoubtedly, getting an advanced educational level like, a master’s degree or even a P.h.D degree, could provide better opportunities to find an exceptional job. For example, a close friend of mine, she got a degree in Nutrition and most recently she has concluded a P.h.D. Turns out that she was worried about became unemployment. Trying to avoid this, she leave a résumé and went for a lot of jobs interviews. However, her professional qualification makes a big difference, highlighting her from the other candidates. Today, she is working in a wealthy company, earning an amazing salary.
Actually, it is pretty clear for me, that getting an advanced education is the better way to guarantee a good career. Since I was a kid my mom always told me, “- Kid! keep studying because, it is the better way to get a good job in the future”. So, like she teached me I keep doing! So, I got a degree in pharmacy, but I am a current P.h.D student and I believe that getting a high educational level, is a very important step which will make a task being employed a bit easier.
For those reasons, I believe that, taking a high educational level, it is the best way for getting a great career preparation. Developing our skills, preparing us to being ready for the labor market.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, look, so, for example, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78054862843 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92318261672 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543640897756 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6094874451 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.894736842 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1052631579 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0957542675705 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302657140768 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0250161969232 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0526609100638 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186580375267 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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